Getting more descriptive in writing settings.

On the 30th of July room 10 played around with the paragraph.

"The house was dark. It was scary there was noises. There was a storm. Lucy could see to beady eyes ahead".
We brianstormed a list of words that were more descriptive eg.... Noises /scampering. We then re wrote the paragraph.

Here are 3 of the paragraphs room 10 has done.

"There were horrible scampering and scurrying sounds coming from the run down old house. Out side there was a colossal storm brewing. Lucy started to see to 2 beady eyes gleaming at her. Dum Dum Dum". By Tyla and Saro.
"The run down old house was pitch when. Lucy entered the house there was horrible scampering and scurrying sounds while the colossal storm was brewing. Lucy saw 2 beady eyes gleaming ahead of her". By Antonia and Jade.
"The run down old house was pitch black and filled with not only the sounds of the pounding rain on the roof but strange scampering and scurrying sounds was where Lucy entered 2 beady eyes gleaming ahead piercing her very soul". By Danielle.S and Jessica.

Report by Antonia